Mason – This is a very strong piece. Some thoughts:
Cover: Done
Contents: Is the photo with the young boy (#10) low res? Please check this, I can’t always tell when viewing this online in the blog.
“& What’s Inside” seems to be missing a space after the “&” as well as an apostrophe inside “What’s”
Text under music group names 1, 2, 3… you need to decide on an approach to how to write these that is consistent for all three. It seems like they should/could be written like this:
1 Flatbush Zombies (2 words) Discussing how psychedelic drugs and real-life trials affect their music
2 Nomad Gypsy (2 words, watch the typo) Finally dropping her mixtape Telefone, which as been anticipated since 2012
3 Jcole’s Lastest 4 your eyes only follows up on Cole’s 2014 Forest Hills Drive and will drop on 12/9/17
Spread 4/5: Nice layout, but once again I’m not sure the writing is styled in a completely readable way.
Heading on page 5 – needs a comma after “singer”
Throughout: Every time you mention one of his albums or songs, please use italic only. No need for bold or quotes around them… currently those names seem to disrupt the sentences in which they sit. (These posts, apparently, do not allow italics… so my edits on your Contents page unfortunately don’t show my italics)
Please print the body copy out for me, so I can mark it up in our next class. After making some type changes, this will be DONE!
Mason – This is a very strong piece. Some thoughts:
ReplyDeleteCover: Done
Contents: Is the photo with the young boy (#10) low res? Please check this, I can’t always tell when viewing this online in the blog.
“& What’s Inside” seems to be missing a space after the “&” as well as an apostrophe inside “What’s”
Text under music group names 1, 2, 3… you need to decide on an approach to how to write these that is consistent for all three. It seems like they should/could be written like this:
1 Flatbush Zombies (2 words)
Discussing how psychedelic drugs and real-life trials affect their music
2 Nomad Gypsy (2 words, watch the typo)
Finally dropping her mixtape Telefone, which as been anticipated since 2012
3 Jcole’s Lastest
4 your eyes only follows up on Cole’s 2014 Forest Hills Drive and will drop on 12/9/17
Spread 4/5: Nice layout, but once again I’m not sure the writing is styled in a completely readable way.
Heading on page 5 – needs a comma after “singer”
Throughout: Every time you mention one of his albums or songs, please use italic only. No need for bold or quotes around them… currently those names seem to disrupt the sentences in which they sit. (These posts, apparently, do not allow italics… so my edits on your Contents page unfortunately don’t show my italics)
Please print the body copy out for me, so I can mark it up in our next class. After making some type changes, this will be DONE!